영작교정 첨삭 서비스

현재위치

Home > 영작교정 첨삭 서비스

What is the best part of celebrating Lunar New Year?

박혜진/2025-02-07

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Lunar New Year is a time when families come together, often traveling long distances to reunite. Spending quality time with loved ones is deeply meaningful. Actually, when I was young, I thought the best part was the lucky money I received after bowing. I remember being so excited to get as much lucky money as possible.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Ms. Jinnie!~
I believe you spent the Lunar New Year with your family from a distance. That may have been the first time, but the effort you made merely to get in touch with them brought you closer together. <3
Chammy
Lunar New Year is a time when families come together, often traveling long distances to reunite.
OR
>> Families gather throughout the Lunar New Year, oftentimes going on a lengthy trip to be together.
Spending quality time with loved ones is deeply meaningful.
OR
>> Creating memories with loved ones is exceedingly worthwhile.
Actually, when I was young, I thought the best part was the lucky money I received after bowing.
OR
>> When I was younger, I believed that the lucky money I got after bowing was the most valuable part.
I remember being so excited to get as much lucky money as possible.
OR
>> I recall being ecstatic to receive as much fortune money as I could.
이전글 목록 다음글