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What is the importance of social activities?

박혜진/2025-02-07

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Social activities are valuable for improving communication skills and building relationships. I think that to live as a social person, it’s important to gain a lot of experience interacting with others. An effective way to do this is through social activities.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi there, Ms. Jinnie!~
I am not socially active since I am an introvert, but as I become older, I feel like I have to change this personality. I'm working on becoming more outgoing despite my shyness, little by little. :D
Chammy
Social activities are valuable for improving communication skills and building relationships.
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>> Engaging in social activities fosters connection development and the enhancement of interpersonal skills.
I think that to live as a social person, it’s important to gain a lot of experience interacting with others.
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>> It takes a lot of experience engaging with people to be sociable.
An effective way to do this is through social activities.
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>> Participating in social activities is one of the tools for enjoying this.
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