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How do financial concerns affect people as they age?

임주미/2025-05-28

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I think as we get old,we should live easily. Financial concerns make pressure and stress and It affect health directly. To teacher. I want you in the class,please speak slowly and fix my incorrect grammar. Please give me a chance to say again and repeat until I say corerectly. Thanks a lot .

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Grace!

You are right! Supposedly, as we get older, we become financially stable, and our worries about money should lessen. But I think that is not the case nowadays. A lot of older people retire without savings, and pensions aren’t enough for their daily needs, so they tend to work even after retirement. Also, thank you for telling me about your requests in class—I will take note of them!

- T. Caitlyn

I think as we get old,we should live easily.

>> I think as we get older, we should live more easily.
Financial concerns make pressure and stress and It affect health directly.
>> Financial concerns create pressure and stress, and they directly affect health.
I want you in the class,please speak slowly and fix my incorrect grammar.

>> I want you to please speak slowly and correct my grammar mistakes in class.
Please give me a chance to say again and repeat until I say corerectly.

>> Please give me a chance to say it again and repeat until I say it correctly.
Thanks a lot.

>> CORRECT