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What is important thing

최민영/2025-04-15

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
My important thing for now is my familiy and my future. Because It is my belief for my life. I wish I become a cool person when I and other people judge me. For my hope, I should believe me at first and there should be at least one person who believes in it. So, I think me and my family are my important things for keeping my mind.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi Jady!
Let's learn new vocabulary words.
There are so many expressions that would match your thoughts perfectly.
We can practice using them.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
My important thing for now is my familiy and my future.
>> The important things for me now are my family and my future.
Because It is my belief for my life.
>> It's my belief in life. 
I wish I become a cool person when I and other people judge me.
>> I wish I could become a cool person when other people see me or when I look at myself.
For my hope, I should believe me at first and there should be at least one person who believes in it.
>> For my hope, I should believe in myself first, and there should be at least one person who believes in it.
So, I think me and my family are my important things for keeping my mind.
>> So, I think my family and I are the important things in my mind.

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