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Have you ever had a special memory or event happen in a restaurant like that?

노승철/2025-04-10

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I have experienced the tent-style restaurant first recently. However, I have many experiences in a restaurant with a special atmosphere. There are many American franchise restaurants in Korea. Among them, there is TGT Friday. The TGT Friday restaurant is large and the serving employee's attire is unique, and when a birthday customer applies, they play several instruments and sing Happy Birthday. Of course, the restaurant also provides birthday cone hats. The memory of this restaurant is special to me because I had a birthday party for my wife's uncle at this restaurant, and it was a party with my mother-in-law, and the employees recorded us on video. She is in the heaven now. I had several celebratory parties with my mother-in-law, but the celebratory party at this restaurant is always special to me because it is the only party video that recorded her.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi David. This is a beautiful and heartfelt memory. You did a great job sharing your personal experience, and it was moving to read about the special moment you had with your mother-in-law. With just a few grammar adjustments, your story became clearer but your emotions and sincerity were already strong to begin with. Thank you for being open and thoughtful. Your memory of her lives on so warmly through your words.

~ T. Lia

I have experienced the tent-style restaurant first recently.
>> I recently experienced a tent-style restaurant for the first time.

However, I have many experiences in a restaurant with a special atmosphere.
>> However, I’ve been to many restaurants with a special atmosphere.

There are many American franchise restaurants in Korea.
>> CORRECT

Among them, there is TGT Friday.
>> Among them is TGT Friday’s.

The TGT Friday restaurant is large and the serving employee's attire is unique, and when a birthday customer applies, they play several instruments and sing Happy Birthday.
>> The TGT Friday’s restaurant is spacious, and the staff wear unique uniforms. When a customer celebrates a birthday, the staff play instruments and sing “Happy Birthday.”

Of course, the restaurant also provides birthday cone hats.
>> They also provide birthday cone hats, of course.

The memory of this restaurant is special to me because I had a birthday party for my wife's uncle at this restaurant, and it was a party with my mother-in-law, and the employees recorded us on video.
>> This restaurant holds a special memory for me because we celebrated my wife’s uncle’s birthday there, and my mother-in-law was with us. The staff even recorded the celebration on video.

She is in the heaven now.
>> She is in heaven now.

I had several celebratory parties with my mother-in-law, but the celebratory party at this restaurant is always special to me because it is the only party video that recorded her.
>> I had several celebrations with my mother-in-law, but the one at this restaurant is especially meaningful because it’s the only video I have of her at a party.
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