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Which part of your childhood you wish you could change?

조아영/2025-04-08

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Actually, I try not to regret the past decision I made. But If I go back to the past and can change one thing, I would want to change my attitude toward my life. Because, in the past, I was a child who was afraid to challenge the new things. That made me miss many chances to grow. Such as, I was too shy so I missed chance to to class president, I was too afraid to apply for an exchange program, I didn't try new sports.. But these decisions made present me and also I can learn to develop myself.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, JAY!

Thank you for sharing your thoughts. ^^ Your answer is thoughtful and personal, which is great! You express reflection and self-awareness well. With a few small changes in grammar and word choice, your writing will sound more fluent and polished.

~ Trixia

CONTENT:

Actually, I try not to regret the past decision I made.

- Actually, I try not to regret the past decisions I made.

But If I go back to the past and can change one thing, I would want to change my attitude toward my life.

- But if I could go back and change one thing, I would change my attitude toward life.

Because, in the past, I was a child who was afraid to challenge the new things. That made me miss many chances to grow.

- In the past, I was a child who was afraid to try new things, and that made me miss many chances to grow.

Such as, I was too shy so I missed chance to to class president, I was too afraid to apply for an exchange program, I didn't try new sports..

- For example, I was too shy to become class president. I was too scared to apply for an exchange program. I didn’t try new sports.

But these decisions made present me and also I can learn to develop myself.

- However, these choices made me who I am today, and I’ve learned how to keep improving myself.