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이유민/2025-04-04

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What are some reasons why privacy is important for you? A: There are some reasons why privacy is important for me. First, I love my own free time that I can rest alone and I can fully get energy and heal my mind during the time. I often run out of my energy to maintain my relationship. So privacy is really important for me! And since I have some secrets that I want to hide from anyone, I don’t want to reveal my diary or kakao talk.Sometimes I wrote my thoughts about my friends and my family. I can reduce stress by writing my honest emotions

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Hello Yumin

A very exciting day to you! Thank you so much in submitting your homework.

Keep practicing on your grammar and you'll see that you'll have improvements that you don't even notice at all. ^^

See you in our class! Sweet day!

-T.Jeny

There are some reasons why privacy is important for me.

>>There are some reasons why privacy is important to me.

First, I love my own free time that I can rest alone and I can fully get energy and heal my mind during the time.

>>First, I love my free time, when I can rest alone, gain full energy, and heal my mind.

I often run out of my energy to maintain my relationship.

>> I often run out of energy to maintain my relationship.

So privacy is really important for me!

>>So privacy is really important to me!

And since I have some secrets that I want to hide from anyone, I don’t want to reveal my diary or kakao talk.

>>Correct

Sometimes I wrote my thoughts about my friends and my family.

>>Correct

I can reduce stress by writing my honest emotions

>>Correct