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Do you think traditions should be preserved and maintained?

이진태/2025-03-31

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I believe that human can't reverse for history progress. So, many traditions and cultures disappeared. However, we should preserve some traditions, even it is not important anymore. We should preserve some tradtions that has soul of nation. because those are our foundations.
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Hi there! It’s great to see you completed the homework. You shared your ideas beautifully—keep up the amazing work!^^
~~Teacher Ryka^^

I believe that human can't reverse for history progress.
>> I believe that humans can't reverse the progress of history. 

So, many traditions and cultures disappeared.
>> As a result, many traditions and cultures have disappeared.

However, we should preserve some traditions, even it is not important anymore.
>> However, we should preserve some traditions, even if they are no longer considered important. 

We should preserve some tradtions that has soul of nation. because those are our foundations.
>> We should keep traditions that embody the soul of a nation because they are our foundations.
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