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Who inspired you to become who you are now?

이진태/2025-03-21

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
I have be inspired many people for my whole life. My parents, friends, teachers and coworkers etc inspired me. I worked with airplain pilots during soldier. they were strong and obsereved the rule. I learned a lot to them especially life attitude .
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Hi there! It’s great to see you completed the homework. You shared your ideas beautifully—keep up the amazing work!^^
~~Teacher Ryka^^

I have be inspired many people for my whole life.
>> I have been inspired by many people throughout my life.

My parents, friends, teachers and coworkers etc inspired me.
>> My parents, friends, teachers, and coworkers have all inspired me.

I worked with airplain pilots during soldier. they were strong and obsereved the rule.
>> When I was a soldier, I worked with airplane pilots. They were strong and followed the rules. 

 I learned a lot to them especially life attitude.
>> I learned a lot from them, especially about life attitude.
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