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홍하은/2025-03-17

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
In the future I want to collect magnets of each countries. The benefits of collecting is that I'm able to skim the past experiences. For example, I can look back which places I've been while looking coins. In a same context, I try to understand people who collecting strange things. Unless the things are illegal or give bad effects to others, it should be admitted.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hannah,

Thanks for sharing your ideas about collection.
-Teacher Ash


In the future I want to collect magnets of each countries.
>> In the future, I want to collect fridge magnets from other countries. 

 The benefits of collecting is that I'm able to skim the past experiences. 
>> The benefit of collecting is that I'm able to skim through my past experiences. 

For example, I can look back which places I've been while looking coins.
>> For example, I can look back to the places I've been while looking at the coins.

 In a same context, I try to understand people who collecting strange things. 
>> In the same context, I try to understand people who collect strange things. 

Unless the things are illegal or give bad effects to others, it should be admitted.
>> As long as the actions are not illegal or harmful, then they ought to be accepted. 
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