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If you could design your own violin keychain from scratch, what would it look like?

노승철/2025-03-10

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Since it is a keychain attached to the violin case, it seems that the violin shape should be present. And I think it would be better if Beethoven or Mozart, who I like, was holding the violin. I wish there is something like a ribbon to engrave my name here. But I don't think the size of the keychain should be too big.

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Hi David! Your writing does a great job of describing your ideal keychain design. Your ideas are clear, and I can see that you have a strong preference for classical music themes. Keep up the great work!

~ T. Lia

Since it is a keychain attached to the violin case, it seems that the violin shape should be present.

>> Since it is a keychain attached to a violin case, it makes sense for it to have a violin shape.

And I think it would be better if Beethoven or Mozart, who I like, was holding the violin.

>> I think it would be even better if Beethoven or Mozart, whom I like, were holding the violin.

I wish there is something like a ribbon to engrave my name here.

>> I wish there were something like a ribbon where I could engrave my name.

But I don't think the size of the keychain should be too big.

>> However, I don’t think the keychain should be too large.