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What are your main ambitions in life?

김승민/2025-02-24

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

If I answer the question at the moment, I think reaching self-actualization is the most important in my life. Through many researches, Scientists said People can live healthy almost 100 years. So I need more than one skills to live ahead 80 years. Skills should be taken long period at first. But when I go up each stairs, I probably reach the goal.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi Seung Min!

Thank you for being consistent.

I'm sure you would improve in no time.

Take a look at the suggestions below.

Let me know if you need more help.

~~ Teacher Sharon

If I answer the question at the moment, I think reaching self-actualization is the most important in my life.

>> Correct
Through many researches, Scientists said People can live healthy almost 100 years.

>> Through many studies, scientists have said that people can live healthily for almost 100 years.
So I need more than one skills to live ahead 80 years.

>> So, I need more than one skill to live for the next 80 years.
Skills should be taken long period at first.

>> Developing skills should take a long time in the beginning.
But when I go up each stairs, I probably reach the goal.

>> However, as I climb each step, I will probably reach my goal.