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introduction of yourself

이현아/2025-02-20

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I’m Hyuna Lee and my English name is Isabelle. When I sayed it, People asked me if I’m christian. because ‘Isabelle’ sounds like a baptismal name. but I’m not. I just liked it and decided to do it. I'm 29 years old in Korea age. I from south korea and I lived in ‘Asan’ my whole life. I am currently working as a designer. and my main job is developing patterns for tiles like wood or stone, texture design. I’m satisfied with my current job. but I’m also exploring other opportunities to work at a better company. I aim to work for a company that will provide me with a stable finance and position. My hobby is hiking. There are a lot of mountains in my country, and I love going to them. Being in the forest make me feel so peaceful and It’s also fun to go with friends, have a picnic, and chat together. I usually go to a mountain near my house. and I try to go whenever I have free time.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Isabelle!

Thank you for your hard work! ^^ Great job sharing about yourself! Just watch for word choices and sentence flow. Here are some refinements for clarity and natural phrasing.

"sayed" → "said" (past tense correction)

"People" → "people" (no capital letter needed)

"I from South Korea" → "I am from South Korea" (missing verb)

"in Korea age" → "in Korean age" (natural phrasing)

"developing patterns for tiles like wood or stone, texture design." → "developing tile patterns that resemble wood and stone." (more natural)

"Being in the forest make me feel" → "Being in the forest makes me feel" (subject-verb agreement)

Your content is great—these small tweaks will make it even smoother!

CONTENT:

I’m Hyuna Lee and my English name is Isabelle.

- CORRECT.

When I sayed it, People asked me if I’m christian.

because ‘Isabelle’ sounds like a baptismal name.

but I’m not.

- When I said it, people asked me if I’m Christian

because ‘Isabelle’ sounds like a baptismal name,

but I’m not.

I just liked it and decided to do it.

- I just liked it and decided to use it.

I'm 29 years old in Korea age.

- I'm 29 years old in Korean age.

I from south korea and I lived in ‘Asan’ my whole life.

- I am from South Korea, and I have lived in ‘Asan’ my whole life.

I am currently working as a designer. and my main job is developing patterns for tiles like wood or stone, texture design.

- I am currently working as a designer,

and my main job is developing patterns for tiles like wood and stone textures.

I’m satisfied with my current job.

but I’m also exploring other opportunities to work at a better company.

- I’m satisfied with my current job,

but I’m also exploring other opportunities to work at a better company.

I aim to work for a company that will provide me with a stable finance and position.

- CORRECT.

My hobby is hiking.

- CORRECT.

There are a lot of mountains in my country, and I love going to them.

- CORRECT.

Being in the forest make me feel so peaceful and It’s also fun to go with friends, have a picnic, and chat together.

Being in the forest makes me feel so peaceful, and it’s also fun to go with friends, have a picnic, and chat together.

I usually go to a mountain near my house.

and I try to go whenever I have free time.

- I usually go to a mountain near my house, and I try to go whenever I have free time.