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What is more important to care for mental or physical health?

이진태/2025-01-13

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Both are important. However, if I should decide order, I would choose physical health care. When the physical health are weak, it is easy to collapse the mental health. So I thought physical care is priority

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~~Teacher Ryka^^

Both are important.

>> CORRECT

OR >> Both hold great value.

However, if I should decide order, I would choose physical health care.

>> However, if I had to prioritize, I would choose physical health care.

When the physical health are weak, it is easy to collapse the mental health.

>> When physical health is weak, it is easy for mental health to collapse.

So I thought physical care is priority

>> So, I believe physical care should come first.