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Please change difficult words to easy words and correct them so that IELTS Speaking 6.5 or higher sc

이영인/2024-12-22

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Are there any old buildings you want to see in the future? Why?Have you ever seen old buildings in the city?à I’d love to visit ancient castles in Europe because they are rich in history. I’ve seen some old buildings in my city, like traditional markets and temples, and they’re fascinating. Do you prefer living in an old building or a modern house?Do you think we should preserve old buildings in cities? à I prefer modern houses for their comfort, but I believe old buildings should be preserved as they hold cultural and historical significance. Where do you usually keep things you need?Would you keep old things for a long time? Why?à I organize important items in storage boxes at home. I keep old things if they have emotional value or might be useful in the future. Are there any things you have kept from your childhood?Do you collect things? à I collect postcards from places I visit because they remind me of my travels. I’ve also kept some childhood toys, as they hold sentimental value.

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Happy Monday YOUNG IN! Monday provides an opportunity to reflect on your goals for the week ahead. If you are working on something that you really care about, you don’t have to be pushed. The vision pulls you! Keep your balance!

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

Are there any old buildings you want to see in the future? Why? Have you ever seen old buildings in the city?

I’d love to visit ancient castles in Europe because they are rich in history. I’ve seen some old buildings in my city, like traditional markets and temples, and they’re fascinating.

>>> I’d love to visit ancient castles in Europe because of their rich history. I’ve seen some old buildings in my city, like markets and temples, and they’re fascinating.

Do you prefer living in an old building or a modern house? Do you think we should preserve old buildings in cities?
I prefer modern houses for their comfort, but I believe old buildings should be preserved as they hold cultural and historical significance.

>>> I prefer modern houses for their comfort, but I believe old buildings should be preserved for their cultural and historical value.

Where do you usually keep things you need? Would you keep old things for a long time? Why?

I organize important items in storage boxes at home. I keep old things if they have emotional value or might be useful in the future.

>>> I organize important items in storage boxes at home and keep old things that have emotional value or might be useful later.

Are there any things you have kept from your childhood? Do you collect things?

I collect postcards from places I visit because they remind me of my travels. I’ve also kept some childhood toys, as they hold sentimental value.

>>> I collect postcards from places I visit to remember my travels and have kept some childhood toys for their sentimental value.