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What changes would you like to see in your country's educational system? Why?

한다연/2024-12-10

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I want to see changes for national college entrance exam in our country education. Because it is only one chance to show our intelligence. We have studied for it about 12 years. But, If we don't have a good condition for that day, we would be so embrassed of it. It is also part of studying to make a good condition, but I don't like this system.

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Hello Nicole,
Thank you for submitting your composition. You are doing well. Keep it up!
~ T. Demi ^^

I want to see changes for national college entrance exam in our country education.
>>I want to see changes to the national college entrance exam in our country's education system.
Because it is only one chance to show our intelligence.
>> It is only one chance to demonstrate our intelligence.
We have studied for it about 12 years.
>> We have studied for it for about 12 years.
But, If we don't have a good condition for that day, we would be so embrassed of it.
>> However, if we are not in good condition on that day, we might feel very embarrassed.
It is also part of studying to make a good condition, but I don't like this system.
>> While preparing ourselves to be in good condition is part of studying, I still dislike this system.