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I think the white Christmas is very beautiful because many snows get off is very cool. And white Christmas is very rare day So more funny.

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What are your thoughts on white Christmas?

I think the white Christmas is very beautiful because many snows get off is very cool.

>> I think white Christmas is very beautiful because the falling snow looks very cool.

And white Christmas is very rare day So more funny.

>> And white Christmas is a very rare day so it's even more fun.

>> OR: It's even more fun because white Christmas very rarely happens.