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김순님/2024-11-07

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When people became over 50years old. We can see their lifestyle with their facial expression. There is a saying "people have to take responsiblity with their own face When they were 50 years old." I want my face looking comfortable and not greedy. I think That is the most graced aging.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi there, Ms. Sunny!
I read your answer and I was quite impressed that you talked about reality and acceptance here.
We have peace of mind, save money, and enjoy things better way if we understand aging gracefully.
Have a great day!
Aki~

When people became over 50years old.
>>> When people become over 50 years old.

We can see their lifestyle with their facial expression.
>>> We can observe their lifestyle through their facial expressions.
>>> We can observe their lifestyle through their face.

There is a saying "people have to take responsiblity with their own face When they were 50 years old."
>>>  There is a saying "People have to take responsibility with their face when they are 50 years old."

I want my face looking comfortable and not greedy.
>>> I want my face to look comfortable and not greedy.

I think That is the most graced aging.
>>> I think that is what I know as aging gracefully.
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