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cheap ways to stay healthy

양기연/2024-11-06

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It's possible to stay healthy without spending too much money. We can exercise without going to a gym. Before doing Pilates in the gym, I used to gog and take a walk almost every day. And every weekend, I climbed Gwanak mountain with my husband. After climbing or intense exercises, I would take a lower-body bathing. To be healthy, I tried to keep healthy diet. I quit eating or drinking at night. And I tried to avoid eating out. Eating out makes me overeat and spend much money.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi, Gi Yean!
Thank you for doing your homework. I agree, and I also know that there are really cheap ways to be healthy, like what you've mentioned. However, I think people still prefer to spend a lot of money on it, which is ironic. But I think it's also a way for them to motivate themselves.
- T. Caitlyn 
It's possible to stay healthy without spending too much money. 
>> CORRECT 
We can exercise without going to a gym. 
>> CORRECT 
Before doing Pilates in the gym, I used to gog and take a walk almost every day. 
>> Before doing Pilates in the gym, I used to jog and take a walk almost every day.
And every weekend, I climbed Gwanak mountain with my husband. 
>> CORRECT 
After climbing or intense exercises, I would take a lower-body bathing. 
>> After climbing or intense exercises, I would take a lower-body bath.
To be healthy, I tried to keep healthy diet. 
>> To be healthy, I tried to keep a healthy diet.
I quit eating or drinking at night. 
>> CORRECT 
And I tried to avoid eating out. 
>> CORRECT 
Eating out makes me overeat and spend much money.
>> Eating out makes me overeat and spend a lot of money.
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