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Have you ever dreamt about something that later came true?

김예린/2024-10-15

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Yes, I have one. I dremt about entering to the popular university. There are some universities that famous and high level in Korea. I was wondering about campus life and I wanted to be a proud daughter to my parents. However, I failed to the test and interview when I was 19 years old. Inevitably, I entered a university that I had never thought about. Therefore I couldn't enjoy a campus life and felt depressed. In order to give up regret, I studied for the test while I studied my major in the university at the same time in my second year of university. Fortunately I was able to enter the university that I wanted a year later. I think I was lucky.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey there, Lin! Thank you for sharing your experience! It’s inspiring to see how you turned a setback into an opportunity. Your determination to study hard and pursue your dreams is commendable. I’m glad you achieved your goal of entering the university you wanted.

~T. Jenna

Yes, I have one. I dremt about entering to the popular university.

>>Yes, I have one. I dreamt about entering the popular university.

>>Yes, I have one. I envisioned myself gaining admission to a prestigious university.

There are some universities that famous and high level in Korea.

>>There are some universities that are famous and of a high level in Korea.

>>Several universities in Korea are renowned and esteemed for their high academic standards.

I was wondering about campus life and I wanted to be a proud daughter to my parents.

>>I was wondering about campus life and wanted to make my parents proud.

However, I failed to the test and interview when I was 19 years old.

>>However, I failed the test and the interview when I was 19 years old.

>>However, I flunked the test and the interview when I was 19.

Inevitably, I entered a university that I had never thought about.

Correct, or

>>Inevitably, I enrolled in a university that I had never considered.

Therefore, I couldn't enjoy a campus life and felt depressed.

Correct, or

>>As a result, I couldn't make the most of campus life and ended up feeling down.

In order to give up regret, I studied for the test while I studied my major in the university at the same time in my second year of university.

>>To overcome my regrets, I studied for the test while studying / pursuing my major in my second year at university.

Fortunately I was able to enter the university that I wanted a year later.

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>>Fortunately, I gained admission to my desired university a year later.

I think I was lucky.

Correct, or

>>I consider myself fortunate.