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류건우/2024-10-15

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Q: How can we reduce crime? With harsher punishments or better education? A: I think both would be needed. If people get a better education, then people would know the reason why they shouldn't commit crimes. Still, there are some people who don't get enough education and they won't commit crimes if they know the punishments are harsher.
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Hi, Paul!

Thank you for answering your homework.

~T. Divina^^

Here are some considerations:

1. I think both would be needed.
>>I think both are needed.

2. If people get a better education, then people would know the reason why they shouldn't commit crimes.
>>If people get better education, then they will know the reason why they shouldn't commit crimes.

3. Still, there are some people who don't get enough education and they won't commit crimes if they know the punishments are harsher.
>>Still, there are some people who don't get enough education but won't commit crimes once they know the punishments are harsher.

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