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10/11 home work

장승우/2024-10-14

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If i redesign school, I'll make some trails which we can rest.Becuase when i study i am too tired to study. and i'll make some market because i don't have market in school amd I feel uncomfortable
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Hi Justin!
I like the way you kept things simple.
That's why your composition was easy to understand today.
Keep up the good work.
Simplicity is the best.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
If i redesign school, I'll make some trails which we can rest.
>> If I can redesign my school, I want to create places where students can rest.
Becuase when i study i am too tired to study.
>> It's because when I study, I get too tired. 
and i'll make some market because i don't have market in school amd I feel uncomfortable
>> I also want to have a market in school so that I would feel more comfortable there. 
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