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이상도/2024-10-01

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: ESSAY: Some people suggest that a country should try to produce all the food for its population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? I think such an idea would have more disadvantages than benefits. I think that most of the food is produced and sold a lot of it, but not buying a lot of it means that the people of the country don't even have food to eat. So, it is the wrong way and we cannot survive in a globalized world in that way.

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Hi Lee! It's great to see you dedicating time to your homework again. I really appreciate your effort, and I hope you find value in your writing process. Keep up the fantastic work!

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

I think such an idea would have more disadvantages than benefits.

>>> I think such idea would have more disadvantages than benefits.

I think that most of the food is produced and sold a lot of it, but not buying a lot of it means that the people of the country don't even have food to eat.

>>> I think a lot of food is produced and sold, but many people in the country still don’t have enough to eat.

So, it is the wrong way and we cannot survive in a globalized world in that way.

>>> This approach is unsustainable, and we can't thrive in a globalized world with such practices.