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이상도/2024-10-01

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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: ESSAY: Today, some young people say that their mobile phones are the most important thing they own. Do you think that the popularity of mobile phones is a good or bad thing? I think owning a cell phone has a very bad effect. With cell phones, we humans stop thinking and make no effort to know how we don't know. We just type on a small screen. We don't look at books or listen to experts. They can get into accidents while believing and copying only the information that may be wrong. Although there are many benefits, I think the use of cell phones has more bad effects.

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Hi Lee! It's great to see you dedicating time to your homework again. I really appreciate your effort, and I hope you find value in your writing process. Keep up the fantastic work!

>>> TEACHER GEMMA

I think owning a cell phone has a very bad effect.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

OR>>> I believe that owning a cell phone can have negative effects.

With cell phones, we humans stop thinking and make no effort to know how we don't know.

>>> With cell phones, we often stop thinking critically and neglect the effort to understand what we don’t know.

We just type on a small screen.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

We don't look at books or listen to experts.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

OR>>> We don't read books or listen to experts.

They can get into accidents while believing and copying only the information that may be wrong.

>>> They can end up in accidents by believing and copying incorrect information.

Although there are many benefits, I think the use of cellphones has more bad effects.

>>> CORRECT~!^^

OR>>> Although there are benefits, I think cell phones have more negative effects.