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Which athletic sport is worst for children. Why?

차진혁/2024-10-01

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I think weightlifting is worst for children sport because If children not careful, they can break a bone. But if Future hopes is weightlifting players, weightlifting isn't worst for the children.
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I think weightlifting is worst for children sport because If children not careful, they can break a bone.
>> I think weightlifting is the worst sport for children because if children are not careful, they can break a bone.

But if Future hopes is weightlifting players, weightlifting isn't worst for the children.
>> But if children hope to become professional weightlifters in the future, weightlifting isn't the worst for them. 
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