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양기연/2024-09-30

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I think retirement is the end of invariable routines and new opportunities to do various things. If I retire, I will travel our country and other countries. If I retire, I will sometimes stay in the library to read. If I retire, I'll often climb with my husband or friends. If I retire and need to get a job, I will try to start an employee not an employer.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Gi Yean!

It's very interesting how you have a lot of things you can do during your retirement. I bet you are excited to retire as well, but at the same time, you might be worried about the tasks you will be leaving behind.

- T. Caitlyn

I think retirement is the end of invariable routines and new opportunities to do various things.

>> CORRECT

If I retire, I will travel our country and other countries.

>> If I retire, I will travel around our country and to other countries.

If I retire, I will sometimes stay in the library to read.

>> CORRECT

If I retire, I'll often climb with my husband or friends.

>> If I retire, I'll often go climbing with my husband or friends.

If I retire and need to get a job, I will try to start an employee not an employer.

>> If I retire and need to get a job, I will try to become an employee, not an employer.