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Is it important to study about the outer space?

박준현/2024-09-24

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I think is important to be the dreamjob is Astornaut. But it can be important for normal people too. When I was young, I like space. Maybe, that time, my favorite was space. But this time is subway. Because, subway is fast, funny sounds and colors. These are the reasons why I think learning space is important. And I was young, I like space, And at the present, I like subways.

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Hi, Henry!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Always do your best!
~ T. Camille

I think is important to be the dreamjob is Astornaut.

>> I think it is important if your dream job is to be an astronaut.

But, it can be important for normal people, too.

>> CORRECT!
When I was young, I like space.

>> When I was young, I used to like the space.

Maybe, that time, my favorite was space.

>> Maybe, that time, my favorite was the space.

But this time is subway.

>> But this time, I am more interested in subways.

Because, subway is fast, funny sounds and colors.

>> That's because subways are fast, colorful, and has funny sounds.

These are the reasons why I think learning space is important.

>> CORRECT!

And I was young, I like space, And at the present, I like subways.

>> When I was young, I used to like the outer space, but now, I like learning about subways.