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How important are weekends in maintaining a healthy work-life balance?

이진태/2024-09-19

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
In my opinon, the weekends is important to refresh. Human are not a robot, so break time is necessary. Weekends could give energy. That's why weekends are necessry.
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Hi! I'm so pleased you took the time to complete the homework. You did an excellent job sharing your experiences and ideas—keep up the great work!^^
~~Teacher Ryka^^


In my opinon, the weekends is important to refresh.
>> In my opinion, weekends are important for refreshing. 

Human are not a robot, so break time is necessary.
>> Humans are not robots, so taking breaks is necessary. 

Weekends could give energy. That's why weekends are necessry.
>> Weekends provide energy, which is why they are essential.
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