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Let's We think about The Important of music.

고득호/2024-09-09

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
What do you think is more important in a song, the lyrics or the melody? I think two both important. But, it is important the lyrics than the melody. Because, Mean of art changed much more on thesedays. We can see two cases about art on20c and 21c. People of 20centry want to know about various Art skill. However, people of 21c want to know About their's massage. We can know many thing through their's massage. The Massage inclouds 'our life, at the time, at the moment, all my life, my love thing, Some one, something, etc We will learn many something through massage.
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Thank you for this Sir Ko!

I think two both important. But, it is important the lyrics than the melody.
>>  I think both are important. But between the two, the lyrics is more important.
Because, Mean of art changed much more on thesedays.
>>  This is because the meaning of art has changed more these days.
We can see two cases about art on20c and 21c.
>>  We can see two cases of art in the 20th century and 21st century.
People of 20centry want to know about various Art skill. 
>>  People in the 20th century want to know about various art skills. 
However, people of 21c want to know About their's massage.
>>  However, people in the 21st century want to know about their massage.
We can know many thing through their's massage. 
>>  We can know many things through their massages. 
The Massage inclouds 'our life, at the time, at the moment, all my life, my love thing, Some one, something, etc
>>  The message includes our life at the time, at the moment, all my life, things I love, someone, something, etc.
We will learn many something through massage.
>>  We will learn many things through the massage.
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