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What things did you often trade when you were a child? Who did you trade with?

김보연/2024-09-03

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
When I was child, I really loved buying something to eat. so whenever buy something to eat, I traded some snacks with my friends. While I gave them my snacks, I received the new snacks like jelly and pie from my friends. that's why I really like sharing snack time!
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Hello, Betty!
Reading your composition made me remember that I never got the opportunity to trade food with my friends when I was younger. In my memory, I was always the one sharing food, but my friends had just enough for them to share. Woah~ I don't know what to feel :/ Hehehehe
Chammy
When I was child, I really loved buying something to eat. so whenever buy something to eat, I traded some snacks with my friends.
>> When I was a child, I really loved buying something to eat. So, whenever I bought something to eat, I traded some snacks with my friends.
 While I gave them my snacks, I received the new snacks like jelly and pie from my friends. that's why I really like sharing snack time!
>>  While I gave them my snacks, I received new snacks like jelly and pie from my friends. That's why I like sharing snack time!
 
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