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Should exams be so important that they can determine a student's future?

맹준영/2024-08-26

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I don't want to agree that exam is important. But exam is so important all student. Most students will study for get a high score. If you get a high score, It's make a easy to enter the nice university and company. In korea, getting a good company is so important for marry and dating. The Exam had a big impact our life. So many students try the test again to get a good result. Many students are stressed and they have a depression. It's so bad. I think It's impossible to change a culture about korea exam.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Jun!

Thank you for sharing your thoughts! You've made some strong points about the pressure exams create, especially in Korea. You clearly understand the impact exams can have on a student's future. However, try to be more precise with your grammar and expand on your ideas. For example, you could explain why it’s hard to change the exam culture in Korea or suggest possible solutions to reduce stress. Keep up the good work!

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I don't want to agree that exam is important.

- CORRECT.

But exam is so important all student.

- However, exams are so important for all students.
Most students will study for get a high score.

- Most students will study to get a high score.

If you get a high score, It's make a easy to enter the nice university and company.

- If you get a high score, it's a piece of cake to enter a nice university or company.
In korea, getting a good company is so important for marry and dating.

- In Korea, getting into good company is so important for marriage and dating.

The Exam had a big impact our life.

- Exams have had a big impact on our lives.

So many students try the test again to get a good result.

- So many students try the test again to get a good result.

Many students are stressed and they have a depression.

- Many students are stressed, and they have depression.

It's so bad.

- CORRECT.

>>> OR: It's terrible.

I think It's impossible to change a culture about korea exam.

- I think it's impossible to change the Korean exam culture.