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Is anger ever a bad thing? If so, when? Why?

이진태/2024-08-23

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Anger could become good inner motivation. For example, Micheal Jordan, the former basketball player, he is famous using a anger in his match to win. He imagined a fake situation to recall anger. However if someone show the anger to others, it is a bad thing.
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Hi there! It’s great to see you completed the homework. You shared your ideas beautifully—keep up the amazing work!^^
~~Teacher Ryka^^


Anger could become good inner motivation.
>> Anger can become a powerful inner motivation.

For example, Micheal Jordan, the former basketball player, he is famous using a anger in his match to win.
>>  For example, Michael Jordan, the former basketball player, is famous for using anger in his games to win. 

He imagined a fake situation to recall anger.
>> He would imagine fake situations to trigger his anger.

However if someone show the anger to others, it is a bad thing.
>>  However, showing anger to others is a negative behavior.
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