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김하일/2024-08-16

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I really love Thanksgiving day. I think you might have heard at least once about it that it celebrates harvest and exists in many countries. Especially on Thanksgiving day, I can enjoy many different types of food thanks to my ancestors. Moreover, considering our family members' busy schedules, you know, we don't often get the chance to eat together as a family but it is truly wonderful that Thanksgiving gives us the opportunity to come together for a meal. Whenever I spend time with my family, you know, it makes me realize how much I love my family. So, I extremely love Thanksgiving day. +::: yesterday, I just talked that I would like to talk with just my pure English skills. So I don't want to know our topic before class. Therefore honestly, I do not look at the book at all. Can I do like that?? If you are OK!

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Happy Friday, Gilbert!

Thank you for sharing what your favorite holiday is and how you celebrate it. It's nice to know that this holiday brings you closer to your family. As for your question, yes, we can do that. I will no longer inform you of our topic in advance.

- T. Caitlyn

I really love Thanksgiving day.

>> CORRECT

I think you might have heard at least once about it that it celebrates harvest and exists in many countries.

>> I think you might have heard of it at least once; it celebrates harvest and is observed in many countries.

Especially on Thanksgiving day, I can enjoy many different types of food thanks to my ancestors.

>> CORRECT

Moreover, considering our family members' busy schedules, you know, we don't often get the chance to eat together as a family but it is truly wonderful that Thanksgiving gives us the opportunity to come together for a meal.

>> Moreover, considering our family members' busy schedules, we don't often get the chance to eat together as a family, but it is truly wonderful that Thanksgiving gives us the opportunity to come together for a meal.

Whenever I spend time with my family, you know, it makes me realize how much I love my family.

>> Whenever I spend time with my family, it makes me realize how much I love them.

So, I extremely love Thanksgiving day.

>> CORRECT

>> OR: So, I absolutely love Thanksgiving Day.