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What's the most fun water activity for you?

차진혁/2024-08-06

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I usally swim in the pool But I think the most fun water activity is snorkeling. I used snorkel once it felt great. If I use a snorkel it doesn't get water in my nose and open my eyes comfortably. And I can see well in the water.
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Here's your revised composition homework, Jimmy. I appreciate your sending it. Please go over the revisions given below. Have a good night and see you this Wednesday!


Cheers,
Jean~~



                                     

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I usally swim in the pool But I think the most fun water activity is snorkeling.
>> I usually swim in the pool, but I think the most fun water activity is snorkeling.

I used snorkel once it felt great. 
>> I used a snorkel once and it felt great. 
>> OR: I went snorkeling once and I felt great. 

If I use a snorkel it doesn't get water in my nose and open my eyes comfortably.
>> If I use a snorkel, water doesn’t get into my nose and I can open my eyes comfortably. 

And I can see well in the water.
>> CORRECT ~~
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