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[HW] What role do your interests play in your social interactions or relationships?

강서율/2024-08-06

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As I`m interested in watching OTTs, I usually use OTTs when I meet someone for the first time. I can easily make the atomosphere more comfortable. For example, if there is a soap opera that is popular, we can share our review about it. Also, if we do not have the same taste, I can still share my favorite movies or TV programs. With my friends, we are interested in going on a trip. When we are too stressed to work or study, we just share the plans or the bucket list of the foreign places that we want to go. Rather it comes true or not, just sharing the plans and imaging the days in the foreign places still refresh me and be the driving force to move on.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you so much, Linda! You are still very young, so you still have a brighter future ahead of you as long as you do not give up. Keep soaring high and reaching your dreams.-Faith-

As I`m interested in watching OTTs, I usually use OTTs when I meet someone for the first time.

>> As I’m interested in watching OTT content, I often discuss it when I meet someone for the first time.

I can easily make the atomosphere more comfortable.

>> Then, I can easily make the atmosphere more comfortable.

For example, if there is a soap opera that is popular, we can share our review about it.

>> For example, if there is a soap opera that is popular, we can share our reviews of it.

Also, if we do not have the same taste, I can still share my favorite movies or TV programs.
>> CORRECT

OR Even if we have different preferences, I can still share my most liked movies or TV shows.
With my friends, we are interested in going on a trip.

>> CORRECT

When we are too stressed to work or study, we just share the plans or the bucket list of the foreign places that we want to go.

>> When we are too stressed to work or study, we share our travel plans or bucket list of foreign places we want to visit.

Rather it comes true or not just sharing the plans and imaging the days in the foreign places still refresh me and be the driving force to move on.

>> Whether or not they come true, just sharing the plans and imagining the days in foreign places still refreshes me and serves as a driving force to keep going.