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What is the best advice you could give to a teenager?

김민주/2024-07-31

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

As the eldest child, I was always jealous of my friends who had older siblings. They could take advantage of the expectations in their school lives, friend relationships and even careers. I used to think they faced the least risks. However, I believe that mistakes and hardships have been the source of all my valuable skills and insights. So if I were to give advice to my teenage self, I would advise, “Try and fail as much as possible”. Additionally, I’ve seen many teenagers feel insecure about their potential. To them, I would encourage, “You possess more potential than you realize, so trust in yourself”

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello. MJ! These pieces of advice are inspiring. Thank you for sharing your thoughts on this. Have a great day!^^

~T. Jewel

As the eldest child, I was always jealous of my friends who had older siblings.

>>As the eldest child, I was always envious of my friends who had older siblings.

They could take advantage of the expectations in their school lives, friend relationships and even careers.

>>They could benefit from the expectations placed on them in their school lives, friendships, and even careers.

I used to think they faced the least risks.

>>I used to think they faced the fewest risks.
However, I believe that mistakes and hardships have been the source of all my valuable skills and insights.

>>CORRECT

>>However, I believe that mistakes and hardships have been the source of all my most valuable skills and insights.

So if I were to give advice to my teenage self, I would advise, “Try and fail as much as possible”.

>>So, if I were giving advice to my teenage self, I would say, 'Try and fail as much as possible.'
Additionally, I’ve seen many teenagers feel insecure about their potential.

>>Additionally, I’ve observed many teenagers feeling insecure about their potential.

To them, I would encourage, “You possess more potential than you realize, so trust in yourself”

>>To them, I would say, 'You have more potential than you realize, so trust in yourself.'