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How do you choose where to go? Are you inspired by other people's travel stories? Or photos? Or advertising? When I first saw Harry Potter . I really felt like a student at a magic school. Every scene of Harry Potter was so memorable and vivid that is not disappear my head , the movie pop into my head whatever i do I thought I should go there. Around that time, a close friend of mine went to Germany. She talked about delicious food that she ate in Germany. So I wanted to go to Europe more.
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                                     How do you choose where to go? Are you inspired by other people's travel stories? Or photos? Or advertising?



When I first saw Harry Potter. I really felt like a student at a magic school.
>> I really felt like a student at a magic school when I first saw the movie Harry Potter. 

 Every scene of Harry Potter was so memorable and vivid that is not disappear my head , the movie pop into my head whatever i do
>> Every scene in Harry Potter was so memorable and vivid that it does not disappear from my head - the movie pops into my head any time. 

I thought I should go there.
>> I thought I should go to the scenes shown in the movie franchise. 

Around that time, a close friend of mine went to Germany. 
>> CORRECT~~

She talked about delicious food that she ate in Germany. So I wanted to go to Europe more.
>> She talked about the delicious food that she ate there. So the more that I wanted to go to Europe.