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Do you ever get confused with new technology? Give an example.

장필구/2024-07-25

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I have one experience. My First smartphone is Galaxy in Samsung. But I was chaged my smartphone to Apple’s smartphone 4 years ago. I think iPhone is more beautiful than Galaxy. but, Galaxy is more useful to connect a computer. therefore, I confused to put the some song into iPhone first time. But now, I am using the Youtube. So, I don't care the connet a computer.

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Hey Steve! Another job well done on the homework. I'm glad you get to express yourself not only during our class but also through writing. Keep it up! ^^

~~Teacher Ryka^^

I have one experience.
>>I have one experience to share.

My First smartphone is Galaxy in Samsung.
>> My first smartphone was a Samsung Galaxy.

But I was chaged my smartphone to Apple’s smartphone 4 years ago.
>>However, I switched to an Apple iPhone 4 years ago.

I think iPhone is more beautiful than Galaxy. but, Galaxy is more useful to connect a computer.
>> I think the iPhone is more beautiful than the Galaxy, but the Galaxy is more useful for connecting to a computer.

therefore, I confused to put the some song into iPhone first time.
>> At first, I found it confusing to transfer songs to my iPhone.

But now, I am using the Youtube. So, I don't care the connet a computer.
>> But now, I use YouTube, so I don't need to connect to a computer anymore.