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임성준/2024-07-16

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What volunteer work do you see yourself doing? >>> I'm doing mentoring to a child of a multicultural family. I teach mentee to do homework every week. But I think It is not real volunteer work. I want to donate my money to sanatorium or orphanage in the future even though it is not much. In my opinion, real volunteer work is sacrificing myself. It is a volunteer work that I give a important thing for me to someone who needs a help. So I will scarifice my important money to help others
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Brian! Your commitment to mentoring and your future plans to support others are truly inspiring. Even if you may not see it as traditional volunteer work, your dedication and generosity are making a positive impact. It's wonderful to see your passion for helping others shine through. Keep up the great work!
~ Teacher Maxine 

I'm doing mentoring to a child of a multicultural family. 
>> I'm mentoring a child from a multicultural family.

I teach mentee to do homework every week. But I think It is not real volunteer work. 
>> I teach my mentee to do homework every week, but I don't think it qualifies as real volunteer work.

I want to donate my money to sanatorium or orphanage in the future even though it is not much. 
>> I want to donate money to a sanatorium or orphanage in the future, even though it may not be much.

In my opinion, real volunteer work is sacrificing myself. 
>> In my opinion, real volunteer work involves sacrificing oneself.

It is a volunteer work that I give a important thing for me to someone who needs a help. So I will scarifice my important money to help others.
>> Real volunteer work means giving something important to me to someone who needs help. Therefore, I am willing to sacrifice my savings to assist others.
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