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At what age do you think a person should be allowed to have a cell phone?

김민주/2024-07-14

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In media, academic researches, and many articles, it is shown that smartphone use in early age groups can negatively effect children's physical health and intelligence. Regardless of age, using smartphones also carries the risks of phone addiction and exposure to abusive content, which can be more critical to children who lack self-control. In France, a bill that prohibits children under 13 from using smartphones is currently under review. Additionally, In Korea, the trend of 'Kids phone' is gaining popularity among parents, while mobile phone providers are highlighting parent-friendly features and functions such as remote content restriction. Therefore, I believe that smartphone use should be restricted for children under 10, and use of social media that can act as a deterrent to proper upbringing should be reconsidered for children until 18 as well. Message after homework: I really appreciate your support and the way you help me improve everyday!☺️ -MJ

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Hi, MJ. Thank you for you sweet message and for always taking time doing your homework. I appreciate your kind words. Have a fun Monday! ^^

~T. Jewel

In media, academic researches, and many articles, it is shown that smartphone use in early age groups can negatively effect children's physical health and intelligence.

>>In media, academic research, and many articles, it is shown that smartphone use in early age groups can negatively affect children's physical health and intelligence

Regardless of age, using smartphones also carries the risks of phone addiction and exposure to abusive content, which can be more critical to children who lack self-control.

>>Regardless of age, using smartphones also carries the risks of phone addiction and exposure to abusive content, which can be more critical for children who lack self-control.

In France, a bill that prohibits children under 13 from using smartphones is currently under review.

>>CORRECT

Additionally, In Korea, the trend of 'Kids phone' is gaining popularity among parents, while mobile phone providers are highlighting parent-friendly features and functions such as remote content restriction.

>>Additionally, in Korea, the trend of 'Kids' phones' is gaining popularity among parents, with mobile phone providers highlighting parent-friendly features and functions such as remote content restriction.

Therefore, I believe that smartphone use should be restricted for children under 10, and use of social media that can act as a deterrent to proper upbringing should be reconsidered for children until 18 as well.

>>Therefore, I believe that smartphone use should be restricted for children under 10, and the use of social media, which can deter proper upbringing, should also be reconsidered for children until they reach 18.