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If you could create a new toy, what would it be and why?

차진혁/2024-07-02

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If I could create a new toy it is Korean president LEGO figure because Korean president figure have not producted. Second, Korean president figure is amazing and I want to have it.

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If you could create a new toy, what would it be and why?

If I could create a new toy it is Korean president LEGO figure because Korean president figure have not produced.

>> If I could create a new toy, I'd make a Korean president LEGO figure because it has never been produced yet.

Second, Korean president figure is amazing and I want to have it.

>> Also, the Korean president figure is amazing so I want to have it.