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How does stress affect people?

이진태/2024-06-19

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

If I were exposed a lot of stress, it will cause many dieseases. For example, I sometimes feel stomachache when I have many stresses. Like this example, the stress is origin of many dieseases. so, many doctor suggest that decresing stress.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey JT! Stress indeed affects a lot of people and is a huge factor in most diseases. We should really find more ways to de-stress.

~~Teacher Ryka^^

If I were exposed a lot of stress, it will cause many dieseases.
>> If I am exposed to a lot of stress, it can cause many diseases.

For example, I sometimes feel stomachache when I have many stresses.
>>For example, I sometimes feel a stomachache when I am under a lot of stress.

Like this example, the stress is origin of many dieseases. so, many doctor suggest that decresing stress.
>>Like this example, stress is the origin of many diseases. Therefore, many doctors suggest decreasing stress.