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No need for charity?

양기연/2024-06-12

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I don't think that one day there will be no need for charity in any society. To make it possible, we need highly advanced and well-organized welfare systems. As long as our society has capitalism and people are seeking for more money, there will be natural gaps between the rich and the poor. And as far as there is a gap, we need for charity.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Gi Yean!

I couldn't agree with you more. It's ideal, but it's very hard to imagine a society without charities or those in need of help.

- T. Caitlyn

I don't think that one day there will be no need for charity in any society.

>>CORRECT

To make it possible, we need highly advanced and well-organized welfare systems.

>>CORRECT

As long as our society has capitalism and people are seeking for more money, there will be natural gaps between the rich and the poor.

>>CORRECT

And as far as there is a gap, we need for charity.

>> And as long as there is a gap, we will need charity.