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Describe your first job interview.

박혜연/2024-06-05

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

I didn’t have interview experience. But if i become about interview, when i success full the job, i will want to say. And at that time, what i really want to say is story that i can give pride someone. I will say, “You can do it, like me!”. And i will divulge success way.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Hye Yeon! I really love your personality. Well, inspiring others with your journey can be really rewarding.

~T. Jenna

I didn’t have interview experience.

>>I haven't had an interview experience yet.

But if i become about interview, when i success full the job, i will want to say.

>>But one day, when I experience it and succeed in getting a job, I would love to tell the story about it.

And at that time, what i really want to say is story that i can give pride someone.

>>And at that time, what I really want to say with pride is a story that can make someone inspired.

I will say, “You can do it, like me!”.

Correct, or

>>I'll proudly say, 'You can achieve it, just like I did!

And i will divulge success way.

>>And I will divulge the path to success.