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The Episode About My Jaywalking

김창민/2024-06-04

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
When I was a child, there were very few crosswalks in my hometown, especially around school. So I always jaywalked when I was in elementary school. At that time, I wasn't afraid that a car would hit me, so I used to jaywalk fearlessly. One day, I jaywalked as I usually did, and I was even running into the road! Then the car was approaching at speed, and its driver honked at me jaywalking. It was then that I learned that jaywalking was a dangerous act, so I became careful when crossing the road.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello, Min!

Congratulations for perfecting the first composition task! No one has ever done this in my whole teaching life in Power English but you!

Your sentences used correct transition, carefully chosen vocabulary, accurate diction, and a straight-to-the point writing style.

It is true that at times, we can violate the law more than one time. However, we will suffer the consequences once we get caught or in your case, almost get caught by a raging car. Then, be safe and be wise.

Thank you for your effort in sending me this homework answer. See you on the next composition, well done!

-T. Donna~

When I was a child, there were very few crosswalks in my hometown, especially around school.
>> Correct!

So I always jaywalked when I was in elementary school.
>> Correct!

At that time, I wasn't afraid that a car would hit me, so I used to jaywalk fearlessly.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!

One day, I jaywalked as I usually did, and I was even running into the road!
>> Correct!

Then the car was approaching at speed, and its driver honked at me jaywalking.
>> Correct!

It was then that I learned that jaywalking was a dangerous act, so I became careful when crossing the road.
>> Correct!  Very good sentence!
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