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Why do our dreams change as we grow older?

박혜연/2024-05-24

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

We know and see the more broad words. We think our dream is not wanted or not easily. And then people forget their dream. This thought is sad. However, because we see and feel many things, we can find the more interest anything.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Hye Yeon! Indeed, as we grow up, our dreams change because we see and learn more about the world around us, which shapes what we want and what we dream about. Great points ^^

~T. Jenna

We know and see the more broad words.

>> Our dreams change as we age because we know and see more of the world.
We think our dream is not wanted or not easily.

>>We think our dreams are not wanted or not easily attainable.

And then people forget their dream.

>> As a consequence, we tend to forget our dreams.

This thought is sad.

Correct, or

>>This is disheartening.

However, because we see and feel many things, we can find the more interest anything.

>>However, because we see and feel many things, we can find more interest in anything.

>> However, as we observe and experience more, our capacity to find interest in anything grows.