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Do people's leisure time activities change as they get older? How?

김일환/2024-05-23

회원님의 올려주신 영작문

Yes. they do. To give an example from my situation, when I was younger than now, I usually play soccer in my leisure time. I was an energetic person. I can't play soccer now. I try to find out a cafe which has nice view and tasty coffee, and I am willing to visit the cafe to drink coffee. I think that I have been changing naturally. When I enjoyed playing soccer, I was worried about getting hurt. To find cafes is good for my family. I go to the cafe with family.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Kevin!

Hmm. I think you're right. Sometimes it depends on our physical abilities to do our hobbies. As time goes by, our taste in things differ too. ^^

~ Trixia

Content:

Yes. they do.

- Yes, they do.

To give an example from my situation, when I was younger than now, I usually play soccer in my leisure time.

- To give an example of my situation, when I was younger, I usually played soccer in my leisure time.

I was an energetic person.

- CORRECT.

I can't play soccer now.

- CORRECT.

I try to find out a cafe which has nice view and tasty coffee, and I am willing to visit the cafe to drink coffee.

- I try to find a cafe that has a nice view and tasty coffee, and I am willing to visit the cafe to drink coffee.

I think that I have been changing naturally.

- CORRECT.

When I enjoyed playing soccer, I was worried about getting hurt.

- CORRECT.

To find cafes is good for my family.

- Finding cafes is good for my family.

I go to the cafe with family.

- I go to the cafe with my family.