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These days, games are now being used in gambling. What do you think of this?

김병욱/2024-05-08

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Most game players recently easy to addicted gambling. So if you enjoy game, always keep your mind just game play. not other do. And second important is keep your running time.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hello Dan!
Yes, some people find it more thrilling when they engaged themselves to gambling. it is one of the most perilous things that can ruin their lives.
Thank you as always for doing your hoemwork!
T. Aki~

Most game players recently easy to addicted gambling.
>>> Recently, many game players are prone to becoming addicted to gambling.

So if you enjoy game, always keep your mind just game play. not other do.
>>>  If you enjoy gaming, remember to keep your focus solely on gameplay and avoid any other activities.

And second important is keep your running time.
Another crucial aspect is managing your gaming time effectively.
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