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Do you think napping is important?

박혜연/2024-05-02

회원님의 올려주신 영작문
Yes, because i think napping rise to quality of life. Animals and babies are important to napping. In the same manner, it is important us.
강사님의 첨삭교정 내용
Hi Hye Yeon!  Absolutely! Your perspective on the importance of napping is insightful. Just like animals and babies, we also benefit greatly from quality rest. Keep exploring and sharing your thoughts!

Yes, because i think napping rise to quality of life. 
>>Yes, because I think napping increases the quality of life.
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>>Yes, because I think napping contributes to the quality of life.
Animals and babies are important to napping. 
>>Napping is important for animals and babies.
In the same manner, it is important us.
>>In the same manner, it is important for us.
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