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임성준/2024-05-02

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1. What do you do when your social battery is low? >> I drink alone at home watching my favorite tv program's rerun and eat ramen or something delicious. The reason why this situation gives me happiness is colaboration with my favorite things. I really like drinking with delicious food. The point is not drinking but drinking with delicious food. And I don't want to meet with a check by my family. During this time, It should be alone. My favorite program is "Infinite chanllenge" which is broadcast for 12 years and ended in 2018. I am sure that There was / will be no program which is more fun than "Infinite chanllenge". I binge-watching this program three times ever. At last, my favorite food is ramen. So this colaboration excites me. But to meet a condition that isn't met with a check, I should eat these after 0 AM. Threfore, instead they give me big happiness, they also give bigger Calorie. I'm so sad.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello, Brian!

That sounds like such a relaxing and enjoyable way to unwind. Cheers to finding happiness in the little things!

~ Teacher Maxine

I drink alone at home watching my favorite tv program's rerun and eat ramen or something delicious.

>> I drink alone at home, watching my favorite TV program's rerun and eat ramen or something delicious.

The reason why this situation gives me happiness is colaboration with my favorite things.

>> The reason why this situation gives me happiness is collaboration with my favorite things.

I really like drinking with delicious food.

>> CORRECT

The point is not drinking but drinking with delicious food.

>> CORRECT

And I don't want to meet with a check by my family.

>> And I don't want to be checked on by my family.

During this time, It should be alone.

>> During this time, I should be alone.

My favorite program is "Infinite chanllenge" which is broadcast for 12 years and ended in 2018.

>> My favorite program is "Infinite Challenge," which was broadcast for 12 years and ended in 2018.

I am sure that There was / will be no program which is more fun than "Infinite chanllenge".

>> I am sure that there was no program which was more fun than "Infinite Challenge."

I binge-watching this program three times ever.

>> I have binge-watched this program three times.

At last, my favorite food is ramen.

>> Lastly, my favorite food is ramen.

So this colaboration excites me. But to meet a condition that isn't met with a check, I should eat these after 0 AM.

>> So this collaboration excites me. But to meet a condition that isn't met with a check, I should eat these after midnight.

Threfore, instead they give me big happiness, they also give bigger Calorie. I'm so sad.

>> Therefore, instead of just giving me happiness, they also give me more calories. I'm so sad.